Jiyu no Niwa

I shouldn't have to comment about the spelling and grammar errors

I like the fact that Leon has to pay for every time he uses his Author Powers by doing chores. Somehow, though, it feels a bit awkward that the game system has the ability to show which of the players are unhappy with life. Strikes me as weird and not exactly well done. The characters who get pulled in are decently written, especially the Taylor siblings, (and judging by the descriptions of my friends who read this, their dialogue satirizing TF is funny), but Leon is the most enjoyable character. The prose is somewhat bland, more like an average textbook than a fantasy story.

Overall verdict: 3/5. Shows sparks of life, but overall flat. Good comfort food if you're upset, but not much else.